Monday, April 5, 2010

I Hereby Offer My Services as the Presidential Editor

Reading the 304-word sentence below wasn't the first time I found myself thinking, "President Obama really needs an editor." But it was definitely the first time I ever thought, "Hey, why can't that editor be me?"

I hereby offer my services as an experienced editor to President Barack Obama. I offer these services free of charge, out of an abiding love for this country. And brevity. Please consider the following as my editorial sample.

Your draft:

And what I’ve tried to say often — and a lot of times this gets discounted in the press — is that the experience of having traveled throughout this country; having learned the stories of ordinary folks who are doing extraordinary things in their communities, in their neighborhoods; having met all the people who put so much energy and effort into our campaign; having seen the ups and downs and having seen how Washington was always the last to get what was going on, always the last to get the news — what that told me was that if we were willing to not do what was expedient, and not do what was convenient, and not try to govern based on the polls today or tomorrow or the next day, but rather based on a vision for how we can rebuild this country in a way that works for everybody — if we are focused on making sure that there are ladders of opportunity for people to continue to strive and achieve the American Dream and that that’s accessible to all, not just some — if we kept our eye on what sort of future do we want for our kids and our grandkids so that 20 years from now and 30 years from now people look back on this generation the way we look back on the Greatest Generation and say to ourselves, boy, they made some tough decisions, they got through some tough times, but, look, we now have a clean energy economy; look, our schools are revitalized; look, our health care system works for every single American — imagine how tough that was and how much resistance they met from the special interests, but they were still willing to do it — if that was how we governed, then I figure that the politics would take care of itself.
My edit:
I won.
Thank you for your time, Mr. President. I look forward to hearing from you.